I believe the person is influenced by the use of the crayon. In fact the writing is only one sentence. As well as a patch of green maybe meant to be grass, and a drawing in the corner that may or may not be a pink, green and red american flag or a postage stamp. I think the writer is less expressive because of this. He doesnt back his argument up or even fully explore it. He doesnt have any examples so although he says that sometimes the voice in particularly an argument may "sometimes be missed by the reader" in this case i think its true because i didnt really get the point that he was trying to make.
I dont think this argument is good. I dont really have any authority to say whats good and whats not but in order to be good i think he should have explained some more. His images dont go with his argument or what i can guess that is then it really isnt good writing.
Thank you for your thoughtful, intelligent post! I find it very interesting that you thought the writer was less expressive with the use of a crayon, because when we were children coloring was used as a form of expression. Do you believe that crayons allow for laziness because the author did not give as much? I also enjoyed the fact that you recognized the fact that as a college reader, we have no real say in what is good or not. Do you not have the authority to say what is good or not because of your age, or for another reason? Keep up the intelligent posts!
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